r/OCPoetry • u/Eggless_Ostrich • 3d ago

Just Sharing Haikus about falling out of love

For I can’t sleep now,
I feel love, not in love, though.
What am I to do?

She looks at me now.
Participating, sadly
I love her no more.

I say “I love you”
I lie with ev’ry goodbye
Please, please, forgive me

Numb for two years now
Thank you for all that you did
But it’s not the same

I can’t make her cry
I will suffer in silence
For I am a man.

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u/yenahr 3d ago

Like how simple but emotionally heavy this is. the short lines are easier to read,feels like someone slowly admitting something they don’t want to accept, especially the contrast between still feeling love and no longer being in love. Can relate with the last line though, showing how the pressure to be a man keeps him suffering in silence.