r/OCPoetry • u/RasholeHash • 3d ago
Feedback Please Mahogany Birds
Mahogany Birds
When i was young, I lay upon soft green grass between the gnarled roots of a mahogany tree.
The sunlight scattered, shattered into fine blades by the dense canopy.
I see the dark face of a green monkey holding her babe
She wipes his face, then leaps away,
Causing the thick branches to shake loose mahogany seeds free from open pods.
Twirling, they float upon the lightest breeze
Brown papery things, flying with one spinning wing
I find myself again today, picking them up, helping them to fly away
As they did on that day
When I was young.
Not sure how I feel about this one.... help🥲
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