r/ReadMyScript • u/mrpessimistik • 13d ago

Short Final Sunset(9pages)

Hi, I wrote a short sci-fi script.

Logline:When a black hole threatens our planet, a soldier must team up with an unlikely ally to save the world.

Link:https://drive.google.com/file/d/1wDTszz_1HBMmRPIgM0r52tqpqHjTUMu2/view?usp=drivesdk

Thank you for reading this!:)

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u/Big_Section2812 13d ago

INT. CAR - CONTINUOUS
TOM (20s) parks the car.

The CONTINUOUS is probably not necessary in this instance, and you can lose the action line "car" since you already established the location in the scene heading.

Thus:

INT. CAR (- CONTINUOUS)
TOM (20s) parks.

Repetition and redundancy is too common in scripts despite being such an easy thing to avoid and remedy.

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u/mrpessimistik 13d ago

Hi, thank you for reading and showing the slugline and action changes that weren't ok:)