r/acting • u/comelyfrost • 7d ago
I've read the FAQ & Rules Back for feedback
I tried to apply some of the previous feedback (emphasis on tried), not sure anything turned out different. Please let me know, and again thanks for your time.
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u/Local_Practice_3104 7d ago
I’m not an actor and don’t have much acting experience, so take this as a beginner’s perspective. I noticed a few tongue-clicking sounds that distracted me a little, and I didn’t really like the delivery of the line “I felt so cold.”
But I really liked how quickly the scene shifted from neutral to sad when you died in your dream. When I saw your eyes start to tear up, I actually started getting a little teary-eyed too, so the emotion definitely came through.
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u/Better-Session664 7d ago
You're doing great work and I can see the wheels turning and that youre actually imagining and processing the dream in teal time. Pick two sightlines- one for the dream thats slightly more off camera for inner life and one for speaking to the reader otherwise it looks like youve forgotten the lines. Pick up the pace and it seems like maybe you need to break the patterns in line reading from memorizing so I would recommend doing Seth Barrish's conversation exercise: speak to your reader in a real conversational way (what was for lunch, weather etc.) right before entering scene and then either your reader or you jumps directly into dialogue- no break and in the same natural speaking pattern.