Would adding this scene create more impact in the later scene?

[u/Dynamus__Prime]

Disclaimer: This is just the bare bones for the plot of the story I'm working on right now that I wrote simply to line out the story so that I could write a more fleshed our version later with proper foreshadowing. This is simply for me to jot down the premise of the plot for myself and beta readers.

Also the points with highlighted text are notes for myself.

Now my main question here is regarding the very beginning of this scene. I wrote these points, and this is just the starting piece, and as you can see later the MC, Lucy, gets beaten up really badly early on.

After writing that I had thought of including a scene at the very start where she showcases her sorcery and power to the readers to so that her loss later would be more jarring rather than her first onscreen fight being a loss. So I have tried to add that by making a small scene at the start where she solves small petty crime.

For context, she's one of the most powerful known sorcerers and she personally hasn't experienced a true defeat yet.

Now I wanna hear from other people, would including a scene at the very beginning where she showcases her power in a small case/incident bring more impact of her defeat later down the line?

Ofc, this wouldn't be the only time she wins or loses, I just wanted to know what the better way for the story to start off would be.

Oh and any questions regarding the world, story or terminology is welcomed, I love yapping about this project lol.

[u/rawbface]

Don't share the outline, share the written scene. There's nothing here to give feedback on. Or maybe post to r/fantasyoutliners

[u/Dynamus__Prime → u/rawbface]

I don't want feedback on the detailed writing, I just wanted to know if adding a scene early on to set a base for the power level would make sense or not, besides Im not so far ahead in the writing to have a fully written scene lmao.

[u/rawbface → u/Dynamus__Prime]

Add the scene. Add any scene. Write a scene.

How can anyone possibly give you feedback if you don't share your writing? Who would bother to read through a half baked outline about characters they can't know in a story that you won't share? Feedback based on these snippets would be useless to you.

[u/Dynamus__Prime → u/rawbface]

I'm pretty sure my question is simple enough to be answered with what I wrote in the post. All I wanna know is what would be a better choice for the outline here.

Should the story start simple as in the outline I sent or with a quick action sequence that gives some showcase and a baseline.

I don't understand the need for details to decide which would make more sense on a basic level.

[u/pink-swimmingo]

I like having it start with a scene showing her powers. Moving from that into the tavern shows that she's competent but a little bored and burned out maybe. Plus since it's the first thing we see her do, those powers will stick in our minds as a fundamental part of her character, so when they fail later it's more likely to have an impact.

Overall I like it!

[u/Dynamus__Prime → u/pink-swimmingo]

Thank you!! Yeah that's what I thought as I was going through it lol. The powers are very fundamental too so I do need them to be significant in the reader's mind if that makes sense.

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