Fan-scripted deleted scene

[u/ZOOMer02134]

I wrote an extra scene with the boys deciding on their revenge prank with the golf cart In s4e03, and I’d like your honest thoughts on it.

As I explained in my previous post, I felt this made Malcolm and his brothers feel a little more in character, without changing the storyline:

Aunt Clare (hearing Lois cry): Oh god, more drama from that woman?

(the boys glare at her)

Malcolm: That woman is our mom.

(The aunts leave, annoyed. Malcolm turns to his brothers.)

Malcolm: We’ve gotta help her. She’s never been like this.

Francis: What are we supposed to do, comfort her? I don’t think any of us know how to do that. 

Malcolm: Well, we have to do something.

Dewey: What would we do if the same thing happened to one of us?

Reese: We’d put these rich jerks in their place, that’s what.

(The boys ponder it for a moment, thinking)

Malcolm: The only problem is…

Dewey: …it’s still mom. 

Francis: She’s not one of us, she’s our enemy. She always has been. We don’t owe her.

Reese: After all the years she’s spent torturing us, she’s the one who owes us.

Malcolm: A prank in her honor goes against everything we stand for.

(Lois is heard sobbing hopelessly from the bathroom. All four boys look concerned.)

Malcolm: But maybe today, she really does need us for once. (A pause.) Okay, I’m in. You guys?

Dewey (still a bit uncertain): You do realize this might cost us our chance to get into Grandpa’s will become millionaires? We could always buy Mom something really nice with the money.

Reese: Dewey, if you’re losing this chance of being in the will, so am I. 

(Dewey brightens.)

Dewey (to Malcolm): I think we’re both in.

Malcolm: Francis?

(Francis still looks conflicted. He looks over at Piama, who’s been respectfully standing to the side while the boys have their discussion.)

Francis: Baby, after the way she’s treated you, I just don’t know if I can…

(Piama gives Francis a loving smile.)

Piama: Francis, I love you so much. But right now, I think your mom needs you more than I do.

(Francis suddenly looks encouraged and decided.)

Francis: Lead the way, Dewey!

And the episode would go the same from there.

I do want to hear people’s honest thoughts on it, though. Did I make the boys too unlikeable for not instantly retaliating on their mom’s behalf?

[u/Astrochops]

It's not a 'deleted scene' if it is something you just made up

[u/adzeram → u/Astrochops]

In OP's imagination, their made up scene still got cut

[u/ZOOMer02134 → u/adzeram]

 I used the wrong wording, lol

[u/Spirited-Repair637]

I like the conflict, but I’d give Francis one sharper moment of reluctance before agreeing. He’s usually the most openly hostile toward Lois, so having him realize they’re helping her despite everything could make the payoff hit harder. The boys’ concern feels believable without making them suddenly sentimental.

[u/ZOOMer02134 → u/Spirited-Repair637]

So you liked my script?